Comments on: Chapter V

By: V

Sun, 12 Oct 2008 16:37:54 +0000

Very nice chapter, for the same reasons as MeiLin and Gudy. Also, the soundtrack kicked over from “Hope and Memory” to “Minas Morgul” just as we learned about the potential of an 8th god. I’m definitely sticking with the LOTR soundtrack from here on out..

By: Chad-Writtenfire

Chad-Writtenfire — Sun, 06 Jul 2008 04:17:53 +0000

Hah, as far as spelling goes I just claim artistic license.

The only word I typically spell the British way is “grey,” since I don’t like the American version of “gray” as much. Maybe it comes from seeing Earl Grey tea…. “Gray” seems ugly.

The actual errors are just because I haven’t bothered to revise the passage. Some others are deliberate variations of mine, but to know when I’d intended those you would need to be half-spider to traverse the tangled net of my mind.

Reminds me of that verse: O’ what a tangled web we weave, when first we practise to deceive.

And a story is a very great deception.

By: cat

cat — Sun, 06 Jul 2008 03:56:02 +0000

Hehehe I’m a teacher…. I have this picture in my head of your teacher’s face after they gave the novel back… I’m sure if one of my students handed me something like one of Merecede’s Lackey’s more notorious novels to read I wouldn’t have a clue how to set my face LOL

Apologies for the spelling Nazi. My students all hate me cos I give spelling tests to them every week even though they’re like, 16 years old.. hehehe.

Maybe you’re sticking with American spellings, and I should keep my fingers out of your pie *grin*

By: cat

cat — Wed, 02 Jul 2008 20:23:08 +0000

Hmmm it’s getting very exciting!
caught a few goblins in the works. Please don’t slap me for being a pedant:)

“Allen sat in an eight chair that was placed at the table, having been gestured to it upon his arrival.” … should be ‘eighth’

“and we will do what is in our power to aide you”… should be ‘aid’. An aide is a kind of secretary buddy.

“My lord does not appreciate guests in his domain.”
Capital L in Lord- it’s a title not a noun. I’d say when talking about this godess it should be capitalised too as in ‘Her will’ but that’s just being a nicky picky.

More please!!! Loving it!

By: nabi al-raml

nabi al-raml — Fri, 27 Jun 2008 00:21:20 +0000

Haha, I’m sure your teacher was confused. Vanyel and Tylendal/Stephen was really well written. My friend (who had a much more positive reaction to the book than your teacher) and I used to refer to any gay guy as ‘shaych’ for a few years afterwards.