Comments on: Chapter IV

By: V

Sun, 12 Oct 2008 16:22:40 +0000

Near the start of this chapter I had the idea to queue up some Lord of the Rings soundtrack.

GREAT idea. Incredible. LOTR:ROTK “The Fields” was a beautiful match for this chapter. I expect the soundtrack will go well with the rest of the story, too

By: Robert Gould

Robert Gould — Fri, 20 Jun 2008 12:03:38 +0000

Glad to see an update!

I also enjoyed reading about the gods and history of the world you’ve created. I think it is the most important aspect of world-building – creating believable (in as much as fantasy can be believable..) structures and characters, which is what you’ve done here.

As for my own story, God knows when it will be updated

By: Ryan

Ryan — Fri, 20 Jun 2008 05:44:33 +0000

A fun chapter. The priestess is rather too believable, unfortunately. Religious people who’d rather affirm their own rectitude than see the evidence before them are a curse.

By: Chad-Writtenfire

Chad-Writtenfire — Fri, 20 Jun 2008 02:42:10 +0000

Oh, I was just being funny, Nabi. I like the questions. I actually wrote that comment in a series of edits, since I kept changing my mind…perhaps I should have noted that.

I called her “a crazy old priestess” myself, in the last paragraph. We’ll have to see if she’s well-intentioned or not.

By: nabi al-raml

nabi al-raml — Fri, 20 Jun 2008 02:36:44 +0000

Chad- Well of course I don’t want you to reveal everything…I just like to ponder. And who doesn’t like rhetorical questions?

Gudy- I didn’t mean crazy like mental institution crazy, but more like aaaaahhh!crazy, if that makes sense.