Comments on: Chapter VI

By: Chad-Writtenfire

Chad-Writtenfire — Fri, 20 Jun 2008 00:09:03 +0000

Haha. But think of the poor forest, so lonely now!

By: MeiLin Miranda

MeiLin Miranda — Thu, 19 Jun 2008 23:26:40 +0000

Very good chapter. One typo: “Leige”–

“My Leige,” Allen said, and bent forward…

I’m enjoying the story a great deal now that we’re out of that darned forest.

By: Ryan

Ryan — Wed, 11 Jun 2008 06:42:14 +0000

This is a really great chapter. Allen’s speculations on things and the depth of characterization breathe a lot of life into the world and its politics, and the titles of the king and these bits on the gods give hints of deeper mysteries that the reader wants to uncover.

By: anon y mouse

anon y mouse — Wed, 11 Jun 2008 02:55:11 +0000

YAY! I love this story!

M*A*S*H units! (or at least the equivalent)

King’s kith or kin?

(I was annoying)

By: Chad-Writtenfire

Chad-Writtenfire — Tue, 10 Jun 2008 12:24:39 +0000

Fixed those two. Thanks for pointing them out.
I’ll give this chapter a good revising when I get back from work tonight. Usually I spend an hour or two revising once I’ve posted a chapter, and I tweak sentences and word choice along with checking for typos.

Glad you liked that list of titles, Nabi. The king here is an interesting fellow.